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Script Treatments and Working Scripts (continued)

Here is a script treatment, related to the PR Newswire story you read. Notice how the script treatment is written in even more intuitive, straightforward language than the working script:



Script treatment format



Script Treatment: 3M "Pain in the Neck"
Client: 3M Office Ergonomics Business Unit
Prepared by: (your name)
 
 
 
 
 
Camera opens on a scene of people working at their computer stations.
 
(Voice over: Christiane Arbesu) MOST OFFICE WORKERS SPEND HOURS A DAY AT THEIR COMPUTERS. AND MANY EXPERIENCE PAINS IN THEIR WRISTS, NECKS AND BACKS BECAUSE OF IT.
 
Cut to CLOSE-UP of woman's fingers typing on a keyboard.
 
(Voice over) ACCORDING TO THE BUREAU OF LABOR STATISTICS, 64% OF ALL WORKPLACE ILLNESSES ARE ASSOCIATED WITH REPEATED TRAUMA, SUCH AS CARPAL TUNNEL SYNDROME.
 
Medium shot of Stover H. Snook, Ph.D., sitting at his desk
 
(Transcript of Snook remarks:) "Musculoskeletal disorders represent about one third of all the worker compensation claims that are paid out. One particular company that I worked for they paid out about 3 billion dollars per year, which meant that about 1 billion dollars of this was for musculoskeletal disorders."
 
CUT TO medium shot of supervisor (Tom Albin) assessing office workers at their workstations.
 
(Voice over) THE GOOD NEWS IS THAT USING TECHNIQUES DEVELOPED BY ERGONOMIC RESEARCHERS REDUCES THE RISK FACTORS ASSOCIATED WITH WORKING AT COMPUTER WORKSTATIONS. ERGONOMICS IS THE SCIENCE OF FITTING THE WORKSPACE TO THE WORKER -- AND EVERYONE IS DIFFERENT SO WHAT WORKS FOR ONE EMPLOYEE MIGHT NOT WORK FOR ANOTHER.

 
CUT TO various shots of activities in symposium room.
 
(Voice over) RECENTLY, EXPERTS IN ERGONOMICS, MANUFACTURING, INSURANCE AND GOVERNMENT GATHERED AT 3M TO DISCUSS PREVENTION AND SOLUTIONS.

 
CUT TO executive of OSHA (Cochran) in white lab coat, medium shot
 
(Transcript of Cochran remarks:) "OSHA is proceeding to issue an ergonomic standard because musculoskeletal disorders are the largest single preventable injury or illness in the American workplace today. An ergonomics standard would increase the safety and health of the American worker and would increase the productivity of the American workplace."
 
CUT TO exteriors of different office buildings
 
(Voice over) SOME COMPANIES HAVE ALREADY SEEN THE POSITIVE IMPACT AN ERGONOMICS PROGRAM CAN HAVE ON THEIR EMPLOYEES' HEALTH, PRODUCTIVITY AND SAFETY.
 
CUT TO supervisor (Albin) walking among office desks, office workers busy in the background; one or two workers give him a smile and a nod as he passes, others are too busy to notice. Albin speaks as he walks, and during remarks, camera tilts up for a wide shot of the bright ceiling lights.
 
(Transcript of Albin remarks:) "It's really critically important to educate people in good office ergonomic techniques. We found in a study at 3M when we do that, that people that implement the recommendations were able to reduce their symptoms by as much as 90%. We also found that we couldn't find products that exactly met our needs, so we ended up developing our own products such as adjustable keyboard trays, document holders and glare filters."
 
CUT TO shot of employees at their workstations, similar to the first shot -- this is where we came in
 
(Voice over:) WHEN YOU EVALUATE A WORKSTATION, 3M SUGGESTS THAT YOU LOOK AT THE WHOLE PICTURE -- THE ROOM LIGHTING, THE WAY THE EMPLOYEE SITS IN THE CHAIR AND THE MONITOR'S POSITION. ERGONOMICS HAS BEEN PROVEN TO ENHANCE WORKER HEALTH, SAFETY AND PRODUCTIVITY, WHILE IMPROVING A BUSINESS'S BOTTOM LINE. I'M CHRISTIANE ARBESU REPORTING.
 

 
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The script treatment is written almost as if you were describing a film sequence -- something you've been doing ever since you saw your first cartoon. Typically you will write your script treatment first , and then reformat it to create your working script.




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